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Post by Phantom on Jan 6, 2007 12:43:27 GMT -5
(Phantom sittig in a dimmly lit room only siiting on a steel chair and as always next to him is The Trainer.) Phatnom: David Alastair, are you ready to meet the master of the darkness? Because the darkness in my soul has been wanting to meet someone who like you and punish you for misdeeds in life. In my world, i am the judge, jury and executioner, so you think your high flying is going to dominate my powerhousing...well you better pray to whatever faith you are beause in the end, everyone i face always suffers the same fate...defeat. Trainer: Calm down, Phantom; Its your first major league match, so cut down on some of the nasty marks and just focus on the target at hand, and that would the GWC World Heavyweight Title. Phantom: Sorry, I got carried away with the punishment im going to giving my opponent. In the end, as my theme says, we will rise.
(Then Phantom stands up and clicks the light off to signal the end of the segment.)
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Post by Danny Vice on Jan 6, 2007 13:11:23 GMT -5
i would expand a lot more on the description at the beginning and your dialogue. you've got a good start here, just get more into your opponent and exactly what makes the phantom so menacing. it doesn't have to be super long, id just say you stopped right when you were getting some decent momentum going.
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